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Warlock Wolf / Bring The Night / Chapter 1

🕑 Added 2024-03-20 03:59:01 +0000 UTC

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L_S87

Also, KT, don't want to nitpick, because ultimately it's a book, it doesn't have to be perfect, but I have issues with certain details that jump out at me. It's a me thing. Sorry! 1. People use a 4x4. They put it in 4WD. (As opposed to 2WD). A 4x4 is the designation of the vehicle itself, not the action. (Sorry if I'm being anal) 2. It's not SAIC, it's SAC.

Bill F Protagoras

As I remember it, he meant sentient, but the character that he was focusing on was a Northern rough but honest young lad... I am very flattered but it seems to me it's your constantly developing love of words and writing that make you better, if my sharing your enthusiasms encourages you I am glad. Also as a long term teacher I suffer from a professional deformation. Fortunately the common 'confusion' between she teaches me, and she learns me isn't really a mistake but a profound gift awarded by apparent ignorance. Not to be confused with I'll learn ya as a threat! I also love how well you use the equivocation of language with such effect like as I said... "Black led the way though he had no idea where he was going." Through paradoxical simplicity to descriptive eloquence... Too much exposure to Spanish has made me lose the fear of big latinate words. The pleasure your work gives me is priceless like going out the door and seeing how narrow the valley walls are, but how wide the sky is... Thank you!

Tracey52

I’m liking it.

Andrew Mellein

That redhead looks like Charlie🤣🤣🤣 Great chapter!

KT Morrison

What's funny is every time I have rewritten this book I always read that same sentence to myself and say "trees can't part, you should change that," and then I shrug and don't do it. Chabuduo. I'm trying to describe how in animation you'll take two cels with trees painted on them and then part them to portray forward movement, ha ha. You've forced my hand and now I must make it right (at last, lol!). And, yeah, "trees seemed alive" is a real stinker. Dead trees may seem alive, but you would need the distinction. Or mayhaps the prose is written from a character's internal discourse and the character doesn't know trees are alive. Or just add what they were alive with in some poetic description like how they're alive with movement, or alive with color or something. Getting purplish though, so it's risky. Thanks, Bill—you do make me a better writer, and make me think it's worth the effort, too.

L_S87

Well, this is amazingly promising. All sorts of intriguing revelations right out of the gate, but leaving us, and poor Porter, lacking a lot of information. Thus we both want to dig deeper. Oh, and Boston is being an asshole. I get it, doesn't change the fact he's being one. Will be interesting to see how things progress with Lizzy. And how the other girls fit in. And to figure out the story with Otterman. The setup stinks there, not to mention Boston's implication that may lead one to believe there was more than a working relationship there. Layers and layers, and were only in chapter 1. Typical of you, KT. Love it.

Steve McCarty

Thanks for a first chapter that has me salivating for more! Love the cover.

Bill F Protagoras

Great cover took me ages to notice the dog... haha! I love the textures of the image.

Bill F Protagoras

Nice final sentence...

Bill F Protagoras

Don't let my quibble bother you... on the first page I believe, of "Game of Thrones" I read the words "the trees seemed alive" which made me dubious about having bought the fat volume that my Spanish friends who worked at the Elektra Comix shop had so fervently recommended to me... they didn't sell it BTW... I mean, I knew what GRR (publishthefuckingend) Martin meant, but basic knowledge of biology is a special requirement for Fantasy writers, otherwise how do they know they are writing Fantasy. By the way, you are a better writer than him, and he is an excellent writer. Just off the top of my head you are more versatile and innovative... also I bet you've noticed trees are a life form!

Bill F Protagoras

Off to a promising start... information rich... one thing that had me floundering in time or space for a moment is... "The flight from Tennessee 'arrived' this evening in New Hampshire," shouldn't it be "had arrived" to make it more routine than subsequent events... I'm eager for more. The most fantastic element is that a woman with wavy, curly, or straight hair didn't believe it to be a curse worth spending much time and attention on remedying. Still I suppose men spend an awful lot of personal time increasing the size and consistency of their penis...


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