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Extra scene for Vengeance Story P1

🕑 Added 2024-05-07 10:22:34 +0000 UTC

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Batcat

Haha sounds good! But nah, like the other guy said, the meaning is clear, nothing *needs* to be changed, just putting myself out there as a potential source if you want any help with grammar and such.

PaTuTena

I’ll put stocking mask in the most recent short story kkkk

PaTuTena

Yes sure mate, then I’ll remake from the start kkkkk 😂

NYSTmd

I personally don't believe there's anything "natural" in those particular circumstances LOL so never mind about any correct or articulate form of "dialogue"... those hot pics talk for themselves anyway...

NYSTmd

Great story as usual mate! Personally wish he had a nylon stocking mask over his face LOL and yes, please send the uncen version of these sketches as it was in the past... many thanks

Batcat

Love these sketched stories, they are fantastic and show just enough. Very happy to hear you’re making a full comic as well! On that note, if you want help with Grammar I’d be happy to help. It’s mostly good here, and definitely understandable, but some areas could be improved in things like word choice and turns of phrase. For example: “I think you’re not in a position to refuse, young lady” works, but “I don’t think you’re in any position to refuse, young lady” flows better and sounds more natural. I have more notes if you want them and, like I said, I’d be happy to help with future projects.