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Demon lord chapter 2 p16
🕑 Added 2021-04-29 15:55:55 +0000 UTCI've spend way too much time on the last panel. My monkey brain can't draw symmetrical face.
So yeah as usual any mistake or suggestion let's me know.
Special thank for those who always help me with dialouge. and grammar i'm truly grateful.
Comments
Sera
You're always really great at drawing those evil expressions!
Arthur Yeung
@Emma Draper I've been working on an adaptation that involves a couple Demon OCs in a nightmare sequence of this.
Emma Draper
If Aria's not interested in joining up, is the Demon Lord taking applications for sexy demon henchladies? ...asking for a friend.
Radiant Xyz
The time you spent at the last panel... was ABSOLUTELY worth it! It looks great!!
Asani
“Come to the Demon Side, ‘me’. We have soft breasts, thicc thighs, and revenge on those bastard humans.”
UltraOrbZero
This has got to be my favorite series <3
MagicCobra911
Despite not really leading to anything (yet?) it is interesting, makes me wish that we got to see Gilbert’s mental breakdown in comic form.
Altrus
Can't wait for more
D Banks
sign me up
D Banks
I love it
Stormfries
amazing !! men changed in a sexy devilin
StarGazer
everyday life serving a demon lord
spectria.limina
Her corruption is so good... I want to see her give in!
Ian Hsieh
I cant wait to see the entire thing finished and I can watch it through instead of page by page.
Arbiter
Ah the what-if if Aria had simply accepted her darker side. The three look wonderful together!
spectria.limina
Panel 4, "get back on" -> "get back at" (not much to say, prepositions are hard). "Those human" -> "those humans". "They dirty work" -> "their dirty work" (possessive). "Those church" doesn't quite work as "church" isn't a noun for people. Either "the church" or use it like an adjective: "those church people" like "those church scum", etc. "That've forced" is probably better as "that forced" imo, but that might just be because of the fact that the comic is spread put. "that've" kind of implies something recent and new, as opposed to something that's buried in the past. Or it implies emphasis. Also if you change to "the church" it would need to be "that's" to match the singular. Either way, "betrayed" -> "betray" because it is in a relative clause, so it needs to be the infinitive.
MagicCobra911
I am a little confused though about Aria’s decisions after this, it didn’t seem like she was conflicted, just that she had a little more attitude/feistiness to her personality.
spectria.limina
Panel 3 missing a period after "each other". "It's" -> "it" (it's is a contraction for "it is").
Arthur Yeung
@ibenz009 Truth be told, I actually thought the sketch was anatomically correct!
MagicCobra911
Wel Damn for some reason it didn’t occur to me that the Demon Lord was going to be naked in that reunion panel😏. This page looks very good and flows quite well.
Victor
Wow looks good
