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Miko spider corruption p5-6

🕑 Added 2022-10-05 21:51:24 +0000 UTC

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ElSalsaRey

Ignore part of what I said for part 2. Don't need the "me". I misread it XD

Nobody-Kadaj

Unless she was more "Demon Lord" and less "Goddess", in which case she would (probably) use more down-to-earth speech.

MagicCobra911

I like the way that Yame-Hime is holding onto Kyo particularly his head in these panels, i get a pretty exotic seduction vibe from it😁.

ElSalsaRey

Page 1: "Did you really become a god?" "I have become her priestess and her avatar." (forgot an e in priestess, same as the next usage) "Quite a mouth you have there, human." (I imagine a goddess would use more formal language, so I'd use "have a mouth" rather than "got a mouth" "It was a compliment!" (you used the wrong tense for "compliment") "It seems like I have to teach that mouth a lesson." (add s to the end of "seem") "You are as big a pain in the ass..." (added more of a clarifier to that phrase) "Starting with you human" (changed "start" to "starting") Page 2 "I was beginning to enjoy..." (changed "am" to "was" since he's not squirming anymore) "Did you really need to turn me into whatever this is?" (add "me" in between "turn" and "into", and changed "that" to "this" "No, but it did silence your rotten mouth, didn't it?" (changed "silent" to "silence", and "isn't" to "didn't") "If it were up to me, I would start tearing you limb from limb for your insolence" (added "were" and changed "insolent" to "insolence") "We are about to become sisters." (changed "sister" to the plural form) Loved it!