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Chapter 28 - Interlude - Jade & Sky

🕑 Added 2021-10-20 23:45:48 +0000 UTC

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EmmaLeia

I was thinking of that when I wrote this. Sky was part of the group that ran with the alarm and wasn't anywhere near the group that got manually ejected. I think I'll have him looking back and seeing people fly out of the ruin door or something is the best I can do without switching perspectives again.

Grumlen

The multiple perspectives worked well here, with enough overlap to infer the events that took place. However, it seems odd that the alarm alone would be enough to drive everyone out since the nobles would have ordered some to stay. Perhaps have the field itself reject everyone instead of just terrible noise?

Jachin Nelson

Thank you for the Chapter


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