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Prejac Zach: Part 12?

🕑 Added 2023-01-15 17:22:51 +0000 UTC

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Jason D Fluffer

I agree what Spam said. I like the idea and think it could be fun. But right now i'm so invested in how Zach and Sadie relationship will look like after this. And how or if Audrey will play a part of it

VonMainz

I love that you experiment with ideas and try things out. I love the hell out of the Roman/Fantasy setting of SG for example. With a bit more foreshadowing I think this concept could also work out!

Grimbous

Awesome feedback all. Thank you so much.

Giles Corey

Silly but not hot, I'd definitely prefer this be noncanon.

Rad

Ya, interesting. I'm gonna have to go with a few of the others on how this was rather random. Didnt seem like a part of this story, just a whole other story. Maybe an idea for another short or something. I like SpamIsNotMyName idea.

nope

It's pretty funny but it did ruin the sexy for me.

SpamIsNotMyName

I like where this is going but it doesn't feel like this short. I feel like a common theme through out the series was going back and forth on whether the protagonist and his girlfriend are going to stay together and ammend their relationship. We even had that here, when she wanted to share the pleasure with Zack and not be so selfish about it. I'd like a resolution on that narrative point. BUT, I also love the idea you came up with. Maybe split the story and keep exploring that idea while still giving this one a satisfactory ending?

Blisscard

Honestly, it's a short, and it seems like it's wrapping up, go nuts lol.

Arkend Foss

if there had been some hint that this was comming it would have been fine , but it just feels strange and pulls you out of the story


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