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Slave Girl 2: Chapter 122

🕑 Added 2024-03-11 17:44:15 +0000 UTC

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Grimbous

Two 'the the' s in a single sentence! I think Avery is giving me his stutter. 😆

Del

Few potential typos: "The fire’s melody is occasionally punctuated by the hiss as a rain drop filtering through the thick canopy above to fall onto the hot stones encircling one of the fires." -> "by a hiss .... above falls onto" or "by the hiss of a rain drop filtering.... above, falling" "All around the the impenetrable darkness of the surrounding forest the the burble and babble" -> extra the "She had at every turn spoke words of strength" -> spoken (not sure if either works) "In Rosa’s words I was as ‘rough’ and ‘hard’ and manly as I could get" -> wasn't sure if ya also wanted 'manly' in quotes

Grimbous

I'll do my best!

Ryan Plummer

I just trust that the story building will make for even hotter futanari slave girl action.


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