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Chapter 82: A Higher Being

🕑 Added 2024-12-27 18:25:32 +0000 UTC

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Manpapper

Thanks for the chapter

teehee15

"After all, not only were they paid by the government, the equipment they lost were also reimbursed, which was usually not the case as they were considered a private entity and all of their equipment were their own." the equipment they lost WAS also reimbursed... "Cindy, however, did not seem to mind at all; she just crossed her arms while observing all the monitor and holographic maps inside the center." monitors** "“Anyone who works with daemons knows your father,” Dr. Ling smirked, “He’s a legend, the exterminator who single-handedly wiped out the daemons who—”" Shouldn't "father" be "grandfather"? Or did they switch people without me noticing? "“Then you have peeked a little in the world of Julian Winters?”" Remove "have" and make "in" "into" instead. "“Why… would you waste a mineral like that on a kitchen knife?”" Did you mean material, or maybe metal? Mineral feels weird in this context. "And before Cindy could finish her words, she was one of the holographic maps flickering and turning red." Please read this and fix it, because while I have a few ideas of what you're trying to say, you really didn't say anything understandable here. "“Send me my armor, I’m going to kill these fuckers myself,” she whispered on her watch." I think "on her watch" should be "to her watch" "And before any of them could even say anything else, Julian lightly tapped his cane on each of their chin, instantly knocking them down." Two fixes, "on each of their chin..." should be "on each of their chins..." and "knocking them down." should be "knocking them out." "Soon, however, the daemon was finally content with relishing on Kitty’s helplessness as it raised its blade-like arms." Remove the "on" after "with relishing" "How could they not be, when the sharp blade of death was just inches away from slicing her torso in half?" Remove "be" from "How could they not..." "It was the fact that Julian was holding back blade arm from behind like it was nothing." Uhh, what? Please fix. Maybe you're just missing a "the" before "blade arm" or maybe you're missing more in there. Not sure myself. For some reason, you used the word "even" an excessive number of times in this chapter, which feels off. "“Hate? Pft, why would I hate them? Why would I even have an opinion of a private company?” Dr. Ling scoffed, and it was obvious that she wasn’t even doing anything in her terminal and was just randomly swiping and panning the screen. But after a few breaths, she even stopped doing that and faced Cindy." First instance of many uses of the word "even" I thought about going and tagging every time you used "even," but you used the word over twenty times this chapter and this post is already big enough.

Rommel Sabido

Weird too since I wrote it using the phone. lol. Probab

Maquiavelis

totally agree

ReadingObsessed

Appreciate the longer chapter! Excuse me when I say MOREEE


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