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Found page 117
🕑 Added 2022-07-18 07:46:46 +0000 UTCAwww no that didn't go to plan at all.
So here's the original https://www.furaffinity.net/view/7111231 and here's the new one...
https://www.dropbox.com/s/oj7o9e712mjvoqs/117.png?dl=0
Now here's a question for you because im genuinely on the fence about it. Part of me wants to add the original words back into that last panel, but part of me feels like the page feels stronger without them. What do you think?
Comments
These last few pages have been absolutely killer for art quality. I think the last panel is perfect without the dialog, too.
Broaster07
I can feel the rejection
Definitely silence in the last panel is better
Maybe a 'sigh' to add emphasis, but the picture does convey Paul's feelings extremely well without any text. Shows how much you have developed your skills! ^^
Jay Schoenhaar
It doesn’t need the text how it’s drawn conveys the feeling in just as powerful way.
Damaronwolf
I feel like silence is more powerful.
I like the new panel, silence is golden
Its much stronger as is imo
DVoid Comics
I think it works better without the last line.
Hmmm... Paul's clearly on a downer in the last panel. While the text does clarify what he's thinking, it's not essential. Leaving it out is fine.
samantha rebecca clarkson
i think you need to add the text, but i agree poor paul.
Vinny the Stump
Keep it as is
