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Derideal episode 1 - "Laura edit"
🕑 Added 2023-02-13 16:26:43 +0000 UTCIMPORTANT: if you find spelling, typos or writing mistakes, please LET ME KNOW!!
UPDATE 1 - some text fixes applied, thanks @twilight @kitfoxboy
I've been slowly working in this fix, part of the job I decided to do to torture myself, because idk, I feel the story needs to be a little better if I wanna print it.
this was made because I learned a lot fixing up Derideal legacy, and the results improved a lot the original, better coloring, improved dialogs and shorten much of the "human" unnecesary scenes, and replaced by some Aden and Laura extra pages.
I hope to make a Derideal part 1 "Laura edit"
I'll just call this version like that, because it includes some bonus scenes of Laura and Aden. but I also took the chance to improve a little the comic per-se.
This doesn't have a deadline, so I'm just working on it when I got nothing else to do or just feel like it.
Derideal "Laura edit" episode 1 includes:
- Dialogs have been changed, simplified or make it more clear and leave less for interpretation.
- Several pages have been removed to improve episode "flow"
- two "new" pages included to improve "Aden" and "Laura" in episode 1.
- some panels were altered.
- coloring have been improved in terms of "contrast" with more of color theory in mind.
- Cover have been improved to make it "more attractive" to look at, it was "too green"
PS. once this is done, I'll try to update the public version of the comic with this new, improved episode. but that will happen "when I can"
Comments
Andrés Barra
thanks, gonna apply this fix
Andrés Barra
with the revisions I hope it will be a little more painful :)
TheNat'LaGuy
I Still don't have the heart the reread this comic because of how heart breaking things are for Adam and Laura dude 😢
Kit Foxboy
Love the additions so far! On page 10, it should probably read, "Have I always been here?" since he is phrasing it as a question.
