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After the Dragons Danced (A Rhaena Targaryen SI) -- 15. Princess of the Rhoynar

🕑 Added 2025-01-29 02:27:47 +0000 UTC

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Neyra

Hmm... It's not that important, tbf. Maybe in the background and in a number of years. Keep in mind, the Targaryens now are planning to co-opt the Faith and bring them under their thumb completely. And they have Dragonstone, a castle which is as Valyrian as they come, with all the Valyrian memorabilia that one could EVER want.

Zenokya

I wonder, does the red keep of your story look like the one in the show ? If yes will there be a scene where they melt down the seven pointed star and put back the Targaryen tappistery ?

Neyra

Yeah. Setting their fleet and harbour on fire was to prevent them from building fleets to attack the Stepstones, which the Targaryens aim to ctrl.

StormyAngel

Probably a good thing you cut all of that out, in the end. The amount in this chapter was just the right blend I think. You got the balance just right I'd say. I don't think you can really disappoint me at least. Anything short of Baela surrendering to Aliandra is fine. Logical moves may not lift the spirits quite so high as destroying ones enemies completely, but they are usually unobjectionable. And she did already set fire to a fleet and harbour (unless I misunderstood the fate of Aliandra's fleet I suppose) so it's not like Baela's holding back much.

Neyra

Yeah, that was why I paced the chapters the way I did. I hope it doesn't seem too egregious looking back. We shall see whether there shall be a dragon's wroth or not Sadly, Cannibal has been very effective in his quest to rid the world of dragons and eggs ever laid in the Dragonmont. But, you are very close to the answer. Stay tuned. Thank you for your support and engaging with the chapter.

Neyra

The world building was worked hard on tbf. I had a version of the chapter where I wrote down the whole procedure of mummifying Qoren (inspired by IRL Egyptians), but the chapter count ballooned to 10000 words +, with very little of it being the actual plot, lel. I had to scrap it and start again. I want the world-building to be satisfactory without overdoing it, so I instead leaned into the history aspect of the Rhoynar and Aliandra's perspective of it, using a backdrop to get her recollections in a smoother way. I'm glad you like Aliandra. The charm to annoyance to naivety ratio was a hard thing to nail, and I'm happy it came across well for you. The next chapter picks up from Baela's perspective in this scene right here, we shall see what will happen there. I'm afraid it might disappoint, but it'll be logical.

Neyra

I'm glad you like it. Yeah, and that was very intentional. I want Rhaena to have more of a mastermind role for a bit of the story. But, worry not, Rhaena/Morning's time to shine will come. They do ctrl the Seven Kingdoms, it's just that those seven kingdoms have not caught up to that fact. The next chapter picks up with Baela's POV in this exact scene, so we shall see what happens with the Dornish.

Emi

That was a great end. Baela is a badass. Only issue I have with this story is that Rhaena didn't get a huge dragon to go with her sister. Would have been real nice to see how Westeros would react to the twin daughters of Daemon basically controlling the entire seven kingdoms. I wonder how the dornish elites would react to their new princess starting a losing war. They must know they can't win.

StormyAngel

This chapter was really great! I loved the world-building, the scheming, the politics. It's interesting to get the other perspective on the history between Dorne and the Targaryens. Aliandra is a wonderful character. She's an idiot, but she's also *not wrong*. The Targaryens are at their weakest in a long time, in the sense that if her plans had succeeded (as they almost did) then she would have secured the future of Dorne for literally decades to come. The idiocy comes in with the failure to properly weigh up the risks if she lost her gamble. She basically saw only the potential upsides and convinced herself the potential downsides didn't exist. And consequently, it looks like she didn't do enough to disguise who sent the assassins. A very believable mistake for an inexperienced young heir newly ascended to her throne to make, I believe. Also, I love the way that Baela decided not to warn them at all. Just steal a march and burn them to the ground. I suppose we'll see just to what extent she'll be putting Sunspear to the torch next chapter, but it's definitely a great note to end things on.

Zenokya

So now we know who did it, very nice! Awesome chapter, loved it a lot and the ending is just *chef kiss. Clearly it is a fuck around and found out, dragon wroth 2.0 coming on Dorne (sunspear or all of Dorne ?). I have a theory about what they are doing on Dragonstone, either they are scouring the island for forgotten eggs or they are building a super vault for eggs or attempting to hatch them. Anyway really good can’t wait for the next one 😊


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