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Chapter 172 Crash

🕑 Added 2019-02-15 10:37:29 +0000 UTC

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Sebastian Osterbrink

Somehow I thought that she still survived. The letter said something "don't think me dead" so I thought until now that the guy killing her was misleading. I was waiting to find out how she faked it. He killed a body double or something. Don't know what to think now.

Deinos

Baaah this shitty patreon killed of my comment, anyway, So yeah, I liked it! First I thought with the letter that you pulled a DEM but you actually stayed true to her being killed; I liked that since it gives depth to the story. I also liked the reactions, they weren't overly dramatic and easy to empathize with, though I know that in real life people normally weirdly deal less straight forward with death.

Bob

I'm fine with this. Just don't permanently unhinge the mc over it. She only knew her on a surface level for a couple of months, when the team was together. It would be like going ballistic over the death of your favorite uber driver. Oh noes, not Ted. I know he liked going over 4 times the legal speed limit, while thrashing out to heavy metal, while high as a kite. Not Ted. This was so unexpected.

Chopper

If you plan on answering some of those questions then it will have been for something.

Chopper

I don't really understand why you killed her off so its too soon to say if it's done well or not. More than anything i'm upset that I got invested in the character and I still don't understand her at all. At first glance I did not like Eve at all, breaking into Ilea's room to steal a damn painting, sure she killed a couple of rapists but her general behavior in the beginning made her seem apathetic and morally bankrupt for the most part. Then it switches to her point of view and it turns out she's this crusader for justice, except we don't even know why or what for.

G. Harthane

Hmm, that's an insight. I agree with you mostly. Though it sucks that I supposedly wasted so much effort. Lack of planning on my part I guess. The whole sudden PoV changes were kind of a mistake anyway and this is the result. The impact would've been greater, I agree. Though at least the impact on Ilea should remain the same. Thanks for the criticism.

Arkeus

Mmmh, kind of cheap. I think having Ilea actually looking at what happened was supposed to justify all the chapters spent on Eve doing this and randomly dying, but it doesn't actually do so. At this point I think you should have just deleted all the Eve scene and do the whole Ilea looking for her bit, then finding her dead. Not only would it have a much bigger impact, but it wouldn't have made the whole Eve arc a boring nothing to go through for absolutely no payoff.


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