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Chapter 177 Negotiations

🕑 Added 2019-03-02 16:27:49 +0000 UTC

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Corwin Amber

'through the ruble and ensuing dust' ruble -> rubble

Zachary Smith

She needs to set the dynamic. Establish she’s in control

Ato

weren't they in an operation`? why is she suddenly fighting him seriously

G. Harthane

They're right, patreon might just be having an issue.

Todor

Huh settings seem wrong... This should be locked for me

Corwin Amber

thanks for the chapter

Corwin Amber

'veteran of their own right'-> veteran in their own right

Corwin Amber

'must’ve become desperate.” Trian said' I think Trian is supposed to be Edwin here

j0ntsa

ummm... i think this might be wrong.. buuut ' “You deserved it, and more.” Ilea said as she let go of Maria. ' -> ' “He deserved it, and more.” Ilea said as she let go of Maria. '

Chymor

As for general interactions, I think Ileas friendship with Felicia could use several more scenes. Both here and in the dungeon where they met. We’re told Ilea like her and it’s used to motivate several of Ilea’s actions but as a reader I don’t feel like I know her at all. It would be better if she was more present as a likable character in the scenes we see.

Chymor

It’s a REALLY confusing turn of events to be sure. I had to re-read it to make sure it wasn’t a guard she was fighting. On second read through it seems to be part of a plan, but still unclear.

Scott

it seems to be a part of a plan? they are the distraction, only she's pissed and wants to hurt him too.

Keifru

...what? Why is she suddenly fighting him 'for real' right as they're doing an operation


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