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Chapter 799 Blood

🕑 Added 2021-11-27 13:16:10 +0000 UTC

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Zir

willa was a village girl that never received an education

Gustavo Claude

Did they sent? The girls chose to go without inform anybody because it'll be less boring.

Doh! Error sentence: "The stone floor was cold, nor was there a hearth in the building where a fire could be had." If you use "nor", the first part has to be a negative. There are three fixes for this sentence that come to mind. (1) "The stone floor was not warm, nor was there a hearth in the building where a fire could be had." (slightly poetic) (2) "The stone floor was cold and there was no hearth in the building..." (most people would write this) (3) "The stone floor was cold. There was no hearth in the building..." (Hemingway)

Love the chapter. One grammatical thing: If you use and, or, or nor, the two sides have to agree in tense and plurality.

Max Lopo

I don't get it. Level 100/200 + machines got destroyed, and they sent a bunch of children to investigate? This is dumb.

BlackRazaras

Thanks for the chapter

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

I would love to see some more class & skill descriptions for the other characters classes when we have their POVs.

yannick schwende

Amazing chapter. Loved it

Kalahatze

Not that your writing wasn't already amazing, but I can tell that you're getting better. This chapter was so well written. I was on the edge of my seat the whole time, I absolutely love it.

Luciaron

Dang...

buca117

I feel bad for Ember, but Willa sort of deserved it. She was WAY too overconfident, to the point that surviving would require plot armor. I do feel bad for her parents, though.

Camelopardalis

I really enjoy these alternate POVs. Like in The Wandering Inn, your world is worth exploring, but, unlike Pirateaba, you never stray too far from your main character. I feel this keeps your story fresh without becoming frustrating. I think this balance is why you’ve passed serials on Royal Road that focus on convoluted power-ups and need to feverishly manufacture enemies worthy of them. Here are a few notes on grammar and typos. I see this as a job of alpha/beta readers, but let me know if you find this sort of thing annoying: “If this is more dangerous than just an attack on Guardians, then we shouldn’t let anyone assume that we now that. We’re less threatening,” Phoebe said. Typo-should be “know.” She gestured towards it, the team moving with silent steps, covering each others backs until they came up on a stairwell leading down. Typo-should be “each other’s” Hyphenate compound adjectives: https://apastyle.apa.org/learn/faqs/when-use-hyphen

Andrew

Thank you!

Chad Hagner

Is momma bear about to be pissed?!

Alsia

Thanks for the chapter :)

Arexio R.

rippp

Blackmoon11

Oh no

Leviathon251

Oh well that sucks. Time for another political purge (:

Rhain

Thanks for the chapter!!!


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