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Poetry & Rambles π
🕑 Added 2025-02-21 05:43:16 +0000 UTCI've been really wanting to get back into poetry lately! I went through a big poetry phase in late high school, early college where I used it as a creative and emotional outlet. There was something so cathartic about distilling the emotional rollercoasters of social life into short, poignant prose. Poetry was this type of emotional packaging where I could share these difficult pieces of myself. A type of communication so masked in metaphor that it almost felt anonymous.
I was originally planning on pulling out one of my old poems to share, but after reading through them I got a little too embarrassed at how angsty they were π
So instead I decided to share one of the poems I wrote specifically for a msub audio I made a few years ago! I had never done a romantically-themed love poem before and I was surprised at how much fun it was to write π
So as I announce my intent to write more poetry and share this lil' one with you guys, I wanted to know if any of you write or have written poetry? And if you do, do you have any advice for getting in the right headspace? Do you let your emotional state bubble to the surface? Or is it more of a focused, creative process? I'd love to hear what you think and to shamelessly steal your ideas π Oh.. and here's the poem!
I wait for the faint trace of a sigh
After ferocity has left her
Beneath the waves and torrential sky
An undisturbed oasis stirs
In the brief moments of serenity
There's a vibrancy of life
Gorgeous, glassy-eyed identity
Well defended from strife
A prolonged gaze is all it takes
For watchful winds and whipping waves
Secrets like these have high stakes
Now sunken deeper than my grave
I think I understand why
Sailors can become hypnotized
I think I want to worship her
Always on my knees, mesmerized
Just watching that breath rise and fall
Enraptured by her Siren's call
(The audio that I used the poem in was originally posted here on Patreon, but moved over to my reddit over here.)
Comments
Defrosted
You're a poet/writer?! I'm really impressed! Thank you for the kind words, sweetie ππ
CupidManna
As a poet/writer myself, lovely, absolutely lovely.
Defrosted
I'm really glad it could help! π₯°
Defrosted
Awwww thank you, sweetie! I love sharing pleasure ππ
Defrosted
What an incredibly sweet comment!! π Thank you so, so much for all your well-written kindness. I feel like I've just gotten back an A on an assignment with glowing praise from a really nice teacher π€ You're helping me feel more confident in my writing abilities.. thank you! π
Milquetoast
Your descriptive writing is always a pleasure to read β thanks for sharing with us!
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Secondly I will say I have written poem back when I was in high school I used as an outlet for my emotions and it really helped most of the time at least
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First I wanna say your poem Wow, this is absolutely stunning! The imagery you've woven through your words creates such a vivid, powerful scene. The contrast between the intense forces of natureβferocity, waves, and whipping windsβand the calm, almost otherworldly oasis you've described is just breathtaking. The way you capture the hypnotic allure of this presence, likening her to a Siren, is both mesmerizing and haunting. Thereβs an elegant, almost sacred reverence in your description, and the emotional depth feels raw and honest. The rhythm and flow in your writing pull you in, like being caught in that moment of serenity amidst chaos. Incredible work.
