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Black Velvet (Original Draft - 2014: All Chapters)
🕑 Added 2023-10-31 21:26:25 +0000 UTC*
🎃 HAPPY HALLOWEEN! 🎃
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Directions:
Follow the link to my WordPress: the password is TobiasSmells2011
There, you can read the original version of Black Velvet all in one post. All other books will soon be consolidated and posted on this site as well and locked for patron members - so that they're easier to read for first-time readers or readers who want to reread without searching through Patreon's awful tagging system.
Only Patrons can view this webpage, and I will be changing the password to posts each month to share them with you.
I will be posting full versions of the books here as well, but as of right now, Patreon is experiencing a glitch where italics aren't working.
Happy Halloween!
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Author’s Note:
The original was never completed, but it was as long as the rewrite. I’ve been editing this original for five months. There aren’t many problematic elements, but please remember that I wrote this in 2013. My writing style has changed significantly (and hopefully improved). This may be jarring to readers who have only read the rewritten draft.
Original!Tobias is angrier, more avoidant & blatantly sexual (sometimes bordering harassment), and harder to psychoanalyze for readers. Original!Oliver is much less self-aware/socially aware, and sometimes, he can come across as insensitive due to a lack of social awareness.
Reading from Oliver’s naive perspective, it’s a little more difficult for readers to decipher Tobias’ complex reactions/triggers caused by ongoing trauma. Oliver’s family is not privy to Tobias’ struggles. The relationship between Oliver and Tobias was tweaked in the rewrite to portray a healthier combination of realistic flaws. Nic was not originally represented as aromantic but as more of a stereotypical young adult jock. Charlie-Anne was not the character that she is now. Abigail Amadeus is a more sympathetic figure.
The only missing chapters from this version are the last two chapters (which are mostly centered around Nic)
Once I find them, they will be added to this.
Content warnings:
Domestic Violence/Assault (implied, alluded to, and seen)
Allusions to Child Abuse (off-screen, mentioned)
Implied Alcoholism (mentioned, seen)
Consumption of alcohol/parties
Albeism (brief, alluded to, towards a neurodivergent character)
Brief, implied homophobia – including a homophobic slur (mentioned, seen)
Strong sexual language and explicit content (alluded to, implied, and seen)
Religion (briefly touched upon several times)
Sexual harassment in the workplace (not explored but mentioned)
Edits: Sentence structure, removal of unneeded sentences. Corrections to grammar and punctuation. Removal of minor but problematic elements that don’t affect the original storyline or characters. No more than that.
Comments
Himmich imanee
I can’t find it can someone please explaine to me the directions 🥹
MythMouth
Oops, I didn’t update it! The new password is now in the post 🥲❤️
Star
For some reason the password isn't working for me ?
