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BTC2: Chapter 42

🕑 Added 2023-03-16 15:01:00 +0000 UTC

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Uppercase

"Being physically attracted to me and actively choosing to fuck me are very different things." Now explain that to Belle, with possibly a few cattle prod jolts until Matty's Little Rapist gets the point.

Uppercase

It's writing shenanigans. As "Rick and Morty" said "We should start our stories where they begin, not start them where they get interesting." This chapter doubled back TWICE for no reason, and repeated the conversation to get to a not particularly strong extension leading up to the cliffhanger.

James Johnston

Been Looking forward to the story Skylar is going to tell.

Jeff Jones

My thought exactly!

Loneshot

I enjoyed the subject matter of this chapter a lot. We’re finally starting to peeling back some of the layers that Skylar has kept to herself. The technical execution of the narrative was unfortunate. Too much experimentation with jumping back and forth in time (which I’ve mentioned not being a fan of before) made the narrative choppy and led to the repetition Wookie mentioned. I think the negatives far outweigh the positives when using that kind of flashback. Still can’t wait to see what happens next!

Wookey

Think you were off your game in this chapter. A bit of repetition crept in. Took it from your usual A+ to an A-. Loved the chapter though.

ForgottenCode

Now that’s a cliffhanger.


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