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BTC2: Chapter 12

🕑 Added 2022-11-07 16:00:10 +0000 UTC

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JetstreamSamBestWaifu

i think this failed to show and not tell eva's positive qualities in her friendship with the group. we mostly see her negative bitching qualities and so really dislike her.

R.J. Miller

OK... now I haven't really agreed with a lot of what Uppercase has said about prior chapters, but he does make a solid point here... Belle rarely ever seems to have to deal with the consequences of her actions. And this one was a doozy... She still doesn't think she did anything wrong. Lily immediately forgave her... and Matt is now doing the same. She was welcomed back into the bed after a couple of days... as if nothing had happened. I don't agree that something bad needs to happen to Belle (and definitely not to Matt), but she's going to have to suffer consequences down the road. And I've seen how you roll, BDA... ...something bad IS gonna happen to Belle. And it will be her own damned fault.

Bluedragonauthor

"permitting the pint-sized pulchritudinous psycho polyamory partner to partake of his penis. Does that last sentence help anyone understand?" Perhaps not, but it was fun!

Wookey

Yeah, BDA goes overboard from time to time. If you don’t like it unsubscribe.

Uppercase

"bodaciously busty girlfriend with the big 36DD boobies...massive mammaries while mashing her melons against both of my cheeks, holding her hooters and happily cherishing the heavenly " The first clause is simply and objectively bad writing. Anticipating the author's trite defense, in what universe is any of this wording considered sexy? Remember a while back when there was a poll on this site - making it, by definition, a poll of paying customers - about the alliterative sexual descriptions? How'd that go again? Also, BDA's protagonists constantly whining and whimpering does NOT make them the "nice guys" the author seems to think they are, it just makes them overgrown children, and using terminology like "boobies" or "tushie" to describe sex acts does not help in that regard. Nor does the author's tendency to infantilize short women, like Belle and Paige and now apparently, Lily, and give them a pass in the narration for toxically immature and appallingly selfish behavior. And regarding Belle, I am actively rooting for something bad to happen to her and/or Matty at this point. He deserves it for treating her actions so lightly. He can "choose to forgive" her all he wants, or the author can say it that way, because he wants to have his drama and also not have to change the story to deal with the consequences in a believable way, but the fact is, Belle's behavior is toxic and dangerous, and it's not simply Matt she is hurting. She clearly has no respect for other peoples' boundaries or how their relationships go or what they want. She is willing to directly sabotage them or allow them to be harmed as collateral damage in her pursuit of her kinks or fetishes. Having her desire for rough sex manifest when her rape victim & accessory (because she made Matty an accessory when she used his body to assault Lily) is angry at her is NOT making amends. Either one of two things happened at the end and as a resolution for Matty confronting her over her Rape of him and Lily: either A. he doubled down and committed a second, just as grievous wrong in raping her as punishment, or B. in place of punishment or atonement, she had sex in an unusual but still stimulating and satisfying manner. In other words, either Matt compounded the wrongdoing by raping her or Belle received sex as a reward for her behavior. It should be noted that the wrong people hearing a version of what happened between Belle and Matt and Lily could absolutely result in criminal charges for Matty unless one or more of the trio perjures themselves. Lily describing the loss of her virginity in the wrong person's hearing (and that sort of person positively infests the campus of their university) and he could be expelled, with no real appeal, due to an "honor system" kangaroo court of extremists looking to address the problem of campus rape by indiscriminate punishment and not remotely interested in a fair hearing to determine guilt. Even if Lily actually wanted it, as Belle claims (and "she actually wanted it" is NOT a remotely viable defense for rape, let alone a morally or legally acceptable excuse) and defends Matty, she could be dismissed as having Stockholm Syndrome or having been gaslighted. The closest mutual friend of Lily and the polycule describes their relationship as a cult. A plausible narrative where Matty gets a public reputation as a rapist, while his career prospects are permanently curtailed for rape, without ever having a day in court to prove his innocence, does not need any more setup than the events of the prior chapter. So Belle deserves whatever bad things might (but probably won't) happen to her in the future of this story, for what she has done and the potential harm she has risked for her supposed loved ones, and Matty deserves whatever might happen to him (ditto) for playing Russian Roulette by permitting the pint-sized pulchritudinous psycho polyamory partner to partake of his penis. Does that last sentence help anyone understand? On a personal note, I find it hard to swallow the way phrases in foreign languages are used in these stories. It does not come across as natural dialogue from people in polyglot communities who have a lot of interactions with foreigners, and more like the author (and when done in public, the character, i.e. Ben's toasts) is just showing off and trying to appear knowledgeable and cosmopolitan. I know zero Hawaiians who actually use the language and none of my Latino relatives drop Spanish phrases like BDA's characters. The plethora and diversity of the origins of the characters also makes it feel like the priority is collecting a set, with nationality often being used as a substitute for personality development.

Wookey

Love the dialogue in the chapter especially Naimh’s. Another great cliffhanger


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