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Breaking Providence Ch. 19 (Original)

🕑 Added 2022-12-06 00:00:04 +0000 UTC

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Cambrian

Glad to hear it~ And don't worry, there are definitely more Erised POVs planned throughout the story heh

SpectralTime

Erised was actually pretty likable here. If anything, I might prefer more stuff from her POV, if only to flesh out her end of the Angelica/Erised relationship.

Cambrian

Thanks for the feedback, I'm really glad to hear that landed so well

Deranged Degenerate

Pretty good characterization for Angelina to fear her Orc fetish. The reasons she 'initially' spread her legs for Marcus was because he checked all the boxes for her fetish, but what about other Orc's, that's a good question to ask. Because despite coming to loving Marcus for who he is and standing next to his side during their journey, the fetish she has fostered for years doesn't just imprint on Marcus and be done with, that's not how things work. What would happen if they came across an Orc, and would lust win over love in that scenario, you did a good job in explaining that Angelina herself dreads whenever that day comes. Just goes to show how Marcus is as a person and how he deals with being the Destined Hero is viewed in the eyes of other people. Much better than explaining about how cool and awesome Marcus is and Angelina and Erised's role relegated to cheerleaders after character introductions. I think your learning a lot in character writing after being restricted to already created characters for years. Learning the strengths, weaknesses, habits, motivations, and pasts of your own character can seriously help in better implementing that into familiar characters of different franchises going forward. Keep up the great work.


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