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A Savage Nature [Bonus #6](Warcraft Insert)

🕑 Added 2023-07-18 22:00:04 +0000 UTC

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john hancock

I think it's less consequence of you as writer (though there is some of that), but is more consequence of me reading story on Ao3 originally? So when I see tag of "MC/Tyrande", and then first major good guy death is Malfurion, it's gets noticed. I understand how it happened, so that was why I wanted to comment specifically on this occasion. This was a fun story and most choices didn't feel this way, so was especially noticeable that the first emotional hit struggled.. Shandris maybe mentioned the "I want you to sleep with mom" too close to the actual event which likely hurt, could have instead happened post time skip. But biggest one for me would be if we had 1 more "oh shit" moment before, as you stop counting who exactly is dying once the story starts majorly rolling.

Cambrian

Its funny because Malfurion's death wasn't so that Rognak could get with Tyrande. Malfurion's death was because I was plotting out the outline for this story ahead of writing it and doing research and realized that the mission where you're supposed to save Malfurion as Tyrande has a time limit in WC3. He is literally supposed to die if Tyrande doesn't rush to save him, and in this story she has no reason to rush to save him because Cenarius isn't dead. So Malfurion dying was a natural consequence of Rognak's presence in the story changing events, not because I wanted Rognak to get with Tyrande. I've written hundreds of cheating/cuckolding stories over the years. Malfurion living wouldn't have stopped me from getting Rognak with Tyrande if I really wanted to. 3000 years apart is a great case for neglect, to start. Similarly, this bonus chapter featuring Rognak, Ysera, and Alex was planned a long time ago and didn't originally feature Malygos' death. I just decided to make it a plot point because I realized Deathwing had more time to heal up in Deepholm than I initially thought, so I figured Malygos could pull the Big Damn Hero play rather than descending into madness like he did in canon. Both Malfurion and Malygos were in fact supposed to be narrative driven character deaths based on a series of narrative divergences that led up to their demises. It bothers me a little bit that people can't look past who I am as a writer and see what I consider the obvious narrative consequences of certain actions and decisions. But at this point I guess I just need to get over it and accept that I've got a reputation, heh.

john hancock

This is delayed chapter 18 feedback though happened again here. Your character deaths can feel porn-driven instead of narrative driven. I don't mind Malygos as much as Malfurion, but it does make Alex's emotions feel uncomfortable. Malfurion felt super awkward. If it was one narrative divergence in a series of them it would have worked better, but the first thing that went wrong in the story being the death of the person preventing a hookup hurts the emotional stakes.

Cambrian

Well, I didn't say he WASN'T going to bend Azshara over a table, now did I? Though yeah, not before the War of the Ancients. As for who he's gonna pork... you shall see, fufufu~

TheSinful

Shame he's not gonna bend Azshara over a table. Would solve a lotta problems. So instead I assume he's gonna pork (checks notes for where players go forward, backwards or sideways in time) er, Draka? Teratha?

Kyo Amamoto

cam you sure you're not secretly writing a worm fic here because things escalated VERY quickly here.

Cambrian

Yus

Cambrian

Alas, Tyrande does not appear again in the bonus chapters, I'll let you know that now! Sorry my dude v.v

Cambrian

fufufufu

Cambrian

Not quite, though there is an Azshara bonus chapter!

Sith2go

Rognak has created so many cross-breeds that he himself is now a cross-breed

LordMarksman

Personally, I want to see a Tyrande Whisperwind fun-filled orc gangbang. Whether that be Rognak somehow multiplying himself or Rognak and some friends (orc male bonding lol) I'm good either way :)

SylverIron

....I'm sorry, the fuck?

Bellerophon

Time travel… pre collapse Azshara? That would be fun lol


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