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Chapter 30: The Pure Spirit

🕑 Added 2022-11-28 16:23:32 +0000 UTC

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Zaifyr

I'll make a channel on the discord and you can tell me all the mistakes there

NorkNork

Found a few more. If this isn't helpful, tell me and I'll stop. "She continued to browse, [Comma should be period] Taking the book back to the table as she collected them to have a free hand to grab books off the shelf." "But nevertheless, Arnold would play a vital role." [Redundant. Either but or nevertheless is sufficient.] storeroom is one word

Zaifyr

oops, fixed

NorkNork

"She remembered seeing some of the more powerful [MISSING WORD], as they were materials being carried from place to place when the mages were still around."


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