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Chapter 286: Following the Breadcrumbs

🕑 Added 2024-01-08 15:00:09 +0000 UTC

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Manlor

Harold is going to have a heart attack when he sees the dragon.

Philipp Battenberg

Thanks for the chapter, and I apologize for my nitpicking in advance! First, there is an anachronism: "was not on our radar." I doubt that anyone in that world, besides Spot, knows what radar is. And there are some wonky bits of text probably due to too much (or too little?) editing: "My sensors. It didn't pick up anything from that whole display outside of the usual, certainly nothing that explained its strange behavior." I think the first punctuation and "It" needs to be removed? "That Void was summoned to. Had its protections damaged." This should to be one sentence?


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