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Chapter 11 Preview - How I Became The World's Strongest Warrior Book 2!

🕑 Added 2025-06-06 16:00:14 +0000 UTC

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Andrei

Caught up. Man, I don't know if you're writing alone or you're using AI assistance but you really need to work on consistency. Through the book and now through the preview chapters there are often logical inconsistencies, issues with system messages and various characterization problems. I strongly recommend you sit down and build an excel sheet for the system part and a full plot outline for the story before continuing, otherwise the "plotholes" will just keep accumulating and it will be a real pity for a story that has such amazing potential (and masterful usage of the english language) to be marred by that. You're writing a story about an obsessive numbers guy for an audience that cares about numbers in a genre, LitRPG that's defined by numbers. so you can't have wrong numbers. You have an amazing opportunity here to enter the hall of fame of stories about neurodivergent characters (Cerim's Hell Difficulty Tutorial & X-RHODEN-X's Stubborn Skillgrinder), don't waste it.


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